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Biting on my tongue so hard it bleeds through my teeth
Click.           The picture in my head flashes from your eyes
Piercing, dark, evil down to your twisted mouth
The deceit reads like a book from those lips
Eyes telling me the continuing lies
So desperately my mind pushes me to say something
My stomach pulling the words out of me
Sinking through me, all the good goes to hell
Attached to strings, I am your prisoner
Puppeteer viciously controlling my every move
Ventriloquist slyly phrasing my every word
Harder I struggle, tighter you grab
Caving in, smothering, stealing every breath.
Given the chance to run,         still        holding back
Finding comfort in this pain like a drug
Addicted to the agony of being nothing
Fiend for the belittlement
Push me down, kick mud in my face
Watch in excitement as I laugh with you, at me
Cackling like a psycho in my own mind, at myself
©2006-2009 ~babyluv
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just wrote this last week.. uuum.. i dunno... feedback plz

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:iconmeeksters:
I love it.
Really, I do.
Excellent job, as always.

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~Me.
:iconladyisha:
I really like this poem. its been a while since i read any poems by you. great imagery. keep it up :)


btw. i read your story and it was awesome and really really funny, we were trying to drink coffee but we couldn't cuz we kept burning our self by laughing so hard :)

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:skullbones: LadyIsha :skullbones:
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:iconbabyluv:
Man.. Thanks a lot.. I did the poem for Writers Craft and wasn't sure about it... I'm so shy with my poetry
I'm really glad you liked the story because I worked sooooo hard on it like you won't believe. Like reallly hard... and I never knew how I would end it so I just kept writing and writing and things sort of fell into place lol.. originally it was going to be three parts long but I felt that would have made it a bit too long and would result in it being a tad boring. That is the longest piece I have ever written in my life. But yeah I'm so happy that you liked it and thanks for the comment. :)!

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I can see inside you the sickness is rising
Don't try to deny what you feel...
:iconbabyluv:
Thank you so very much.. I havent written a full poem in so long.. So I had no idea how it would turn out.
So I read in your journal that your going back to the States.. you must be so happy, congratulations.:)

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I can see inside you the sickness is rising
Don't try to deny what you feel...
:iconmeeksters:
Anytime. Your poetry's always amazing, regardless.

=)=)=) Thank you! Yeah, I can't wait.

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~Me.
:iconahalyakirk:
I actually really like this poem. Good job!

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*~* Rusted Heart *~*
:iconbabyluv:
Thank you... I wrote it all by myself, yay! :):p :clap:

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I can see inside you the sickness is rising
Don't try to deny what you feel...

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